[VisCom] OSGeo Flyer for Where 2.0 - review by Friday noon PST

[Michael P. Gerlek]

I'm working on a rewrite now -- sentences 2 & 3 are somewhat repetitive,
so am trying to replace sentence 3 with Chris's aim to tell we we offer
attendees.

Stay tuned...

-mpg
 

> -----Original Message-----
> From: Chris Holmes [mailto:cholmes at openplans.org] 
> Sent: Friday, May 19, 2006 10:05 AM
> To: dev at visibilitycommittee.osgeo.org
> Cc: Peter Moran
> Subject: Re: [VisCom] OSGeo Flyer for Where 2.0 - review by 
> Friday noon PST
> 
> Yeah, I like the black, and I like the second page best too.
> 
> I'm not in love with the text though.  Not sure I have time 
> to think of 
> something better, but it'd be nice if it was something a 
> slight bit more 
> inspiring, instead of merely descriptive...
> 
> I mean, this:
> 'As the leading supporter of
> such technologies, we provide financial, organizational and legal 
> support to the open source geospatial community. In addition, 
> OSGeo acts 
> as an independent legal entity to which community
> members can contribute code, funding and other resources.'
> 
> Is only really important to people thinking of putting their 
> projects in 
> OSGeo.
> 
> I think where attendees would care more about what it offers 
> them.  That 
> we gather the highest quality os projects together, that we 
> ensure legal 
> protections for _them_, if they build on top of our stuff, ect.  And 
> that they can more effectively spend their money on a shared 
> resource, 
> instead of just paying out to commercial providers.
> 
> And that anyone can join and become a part of us...
> 
> C
> 
> Michael P. Gerlek wrote:
> > Hmm, my notes are pretty much a subset of everything Tyler 
> said (esp.
> > the awkward 1st sentence).
> > 
> > On the last sentence, it would be nice if we toned down the drama a
> > little and added something geo-specific after the 
> "because".  I've got a
> > good writer on staff here, I'll run it by him and get you some
> > suggestions in an hour or two.
> > 
> > I'm happy with the black.  Let's be big and bold and make 
> the inkjets
> > work a little harder.
> > 
> > -mpg
> >  
> > 
> > 
> >>-----Original Message-----
> >>From: Tyler Mitchell [mailto:tylermitchell at shaw.ca] 
> >>Sent: Friday, May 19, 2006 7:58 AM
> >>To: dev at visibilitycommittee.osgeo.org
> >>Cc: Peter Moran
> >>Subject: Re: [VisCom] OSGeo Flyer for Where 2.0 - review by 
> >>Friday noon PST
> >>
> >>On Thursday 18 May 2006 15:08, Peter Moran wrote:
> >>
> >>> - I like the second page, with the logo on the upper left.
> >>>
> >>> - I think logo should be bigger - to fill the space and be bigger
> >>>relative to the headline text.
> >>>
> >>> - The last line of text seems a bit over the top to me.
> >>>
> >>> - The black is growing on me as dramatic.
> >>>
> >>>The compass could be dimmed down and used as a watermark on Tyler's
> >>>Flyers, as a unifying element.
> >>
> >>Peter, I agree with all your points here.  
> >>Is it too late to change some wording? I think the wording of 
> >>the text could 
> >>be a bit tighter.
> >>
> >>-Add "The" to the begining, so it matches tagline in logo and 
> >>makes an easier 
> >>to read sentence.  If they can keep the name all on one line 
> >>still, that 
> >>would be good.
> >>-Drop the ", or OSGeo --" - It interrupts the flow a bit too 
> >>much and I think 
> >>with the logo, we have defined it already. 
> >>-I'm not sure about "open geospatial technologies", let's not 
> >>get lost in the 
> >>world of "open" and explictly say "open source" or, since we 
> >>repeat it later, 
> >>drop "open" altogether in this spot.
> >>-Can we add in "promote" somewhere too?  Maybe replace one of 
> >>the "supporter"s 
> >>with promoter to make it less redundant and to touch on one 
> >>of our key roles.
> >>
> >>-With my suggestions, the first couple sentences could read:
> >>"The Open Source Geospatial Foundation is a not-for-profit 
> >>organization 
> >>dedicated to the collaborative development of technologies 
> >>and data.  As the 
> >>leading promoter of such technologies, we provide financial, 
> >>organizational 
> >>and legal support to the open source geospatial community. ..."
> >>
> >>I have no bright ideas for the final sentence - it's close 
> >>but could be 
> >>better.
> >>
> >>I just started to wonder if I'm going to be able to get this 
> >>ad, the graphics 
> >>and fonts in a format that I could work with.  I won't be 
> >>able to use Adobe 
> >>design formats.  Perhaps we could also get this in a vector 
> >>format, like SVG, 
> >>Postscript or even in a Word format??
> >>
> >>Tyler
> >>
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