[Viscom-dev] RE: [Webcom] Service Provider Directory Launch

[Michael P. Gerlek]

Major thoughts:

It's too short-

* The "not vetted" and "providers welcome" parts are too short to
justify their own sections?

* What other content can we add to this thing to snazzy it up a bit?
Editors like to see product names, company names, quotes from reputable
people, etc.



Minor thoughts:

* para 1: "offering services around..." -- the "around" part sounds
awkward; perhaps just "offering services supporting..."

* para 1: contains "organizations and individuals" in one sentence, then
"firms and individuals" in the next sentence (and uses same "X and Y"
construction later in document) -- too wordy / excessive; perhaps reword
it to introduce and then use the generic term "service provider" or
something?

* para 3: I'd swap the ordering of "are brought to our attentions by
service providers" and "demonstrate sufficient interest"

* para 4: "searchers" could better be expressed as "users" or
"customers" or..?

* copyright date should be 2007

-mpg

 

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> [mailto:viscom-dev-bounces at lists.osgeo.org] On Behalf Of 
> Frank Warmerdam
> Sent: Tuesday, July 31, 2007 2:20 PM
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> Subject: Re: [Viscom-dev] RE: [Webcom] Service Provider 
> Directory Launch
> 
> Jason Birch wrote:
> > I've made some minor changes.  Feel free to revert :) 
> 
> Jason,
> 
> It all looks good.
> 
> > Is there any problem having the PR as by-nd and the page 
> it's included
> > on as by-sa?
> 
> I don't see this as an issue.  The by-sa as boilerplate only 
> applies to
> text not otherwise licensed.
> 
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