[FOSS4G2016] sponsorship is out !!!

[astrid at foss4g2016.org]

Hi Marc,

I have some spelling remarks.

I had a look at the files in the svn (I like svn. Maybe it is not so 
perfect for odt files but great for versioning)

Have a look at the trac view:

https://trac.osgeo.org/osgeo/browser/foss4g/2016/website

It looks likes there are two files which are now two weeks in the svn 
already:
* sponsorpackage_gjvdw.odt
* sponsorpackage_gjvdw_MV-2.odt


I had a look at sponsorpackage_gjvdw.odt and found some typo errors. My 
english is not perfect but I have the feeling thjat some ,,,,, are too 
much in the text. And it sounds like a non native speaker wrote the 
text. Somtimes the sentences sound a bit strange to me.

These are my suggestion. But a native speakers check would be great.

* 1. Row: Dear prospective sponsors ands exhibitors, --> and not ands

* In 2016, the annual FOSS4G conference will take place in the former 
capital of Germany, in Bonn.
--> no , ???

* strange sentence:  Bonn is also hosting many GIS-service providers
--> maybe better:  Bonn is base of many GIS-service providers

* choosen -> should be chosen (or not)

* open source software and open data communities --> better Open Source 
Software and Open Data communities

* It is therefore that we regard the conference attendees not just as 
visitors but as participants. --> It is therefore sounds a bit strange. 
better: This is why we ...

* FOSS4G 2016 is a fine chance  --> better: FOSS4G 2016 is a great 
chance

* opportinities --> typo: opportunities

* we present you a fine number of  -> again fine: better: a list of 
opportunities

* or by marking your place in the exhibition hall. --> sounds strange

* We hope that you will support us, and join us in building bridges at 
FOSS4G 2016 in Bonn --> no , and add a . at the end

Astrid






Am 2015-12-01 20:23, schrieb Marc Vloemans:
> We all are silent so agreed, I guess. Text has been pruned for syntax
> and wording, see in SVN adapted version from the one mentioned below.
> I had my first SVN upload in my life with help from Jeff and Bart  (a
> truly horrid experience....hopefully in the very near future we decide
> that Google Docs/Drive/Hangout/etc are not the tools of the
> Anti-Christ. But an infrastructure by which OSGeo will be more than a
> tech-only, a more welcoming and farther reaching environment.)
> 
> Now, can I start pestering my boss? Or is there an official release
> with logo etc in the making?
> 
> Vriendelijke groet,
> Marc Vloemans
> 
> 
>> Op 21 nov. 2015 om 11:41 heeft Gert-Jan van der Weijden 
>> <gert-jan at osgeo.nl> het volgende geschreven:
>> 
>> A next step to perfect. although perfect is the enemy of good.)
>> https://svn.osgeo.org/osgeo/foss4g/2016/website/sponsorpackage_gjvdw.odt
>> 
>> A slighty rewrittn version, so the text fits on just one page.
>> Makes it easier for Anton to fit it into a nice layout.
>> 
>> Your votes please!
>> 
>> 
>> 
>> till.adams at fossgis.de schreef:
>> 
>>> Hi list,
>>> 
>>> not perfect, but better than nothing. I just kicked the call for 
>>> sponsorship out of the door ;-)
>>> We've created (quick and dirty ,-)) kind of brochure for sponsorship, 
>>> I hope Anton will be able to tune the layout a little bit soon:
>>> http://2016.foss4g.org/files/foss4g/media/info_sponsors_and_exhibitors.pdf
>>> 
>>> 
>>> Have a nice weekend!
>>> 
>>> Till
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>> 
>> 
>> Gert-Jan van der Weijden
>> Voorzitter Stichting OSGeo.nl
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